Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, please share your story.

1) I made slipcovers for my doll house furniture when I was ten.궁금을 자아내거나 강렬한 한 문장으로 “훅"/”오프닝"을 구성하는 것이 좋습니다. 예를 들어 심상, 대화나 움직임, 냄새/소리 등의 구체적인 장면으로 시작하면 보다 눈에 띌 수 있습니다. I had a nice matching set for the living room—a sofa, an arm chair, and an ottoman—all in a gray and pink floral pattern. 2) I didn’t dislike the furniture, but on a rainy Saturday, I decided it was time to switch things up a little bit, so I dug out some scrap material—navy blue—along with some thread, a needle, and a pair of scissors from my mother’s sewing desk.문장이 과도하게 길게 나열되어 있습니다. 짧고 긴 문장들을 적절히 배치해 입학사정관이 읽기 쉽고 편하게 만들어 주어야 합니다. 의도적으로 수차례 문장을 끊어서 강렬한 3단어짜리 문장으로 읽기 편하게 하는 방법이 가장 좋습니다.

A few days later, my doll house family had a nice, newly reupholstered living room set.
I’ve always been a crafter. From the early days of Kindergarten macaroni ornaments, to making my own prom dress last year, I’ve had a knack for creating things. For drafting sketches, drawing plans, making calculations, gathering supplies, adding finishing touches. 3) There is something so satisfying about holding something you, and you alone, have made—something that was just an image in your mind until you set about to bring it into existence, to create something new, something different.상상 속 물건을 직접 만드는 과정에서 느끼는 성취감’이라는 분명한 취미와 의미를 부여했습니다. 본인이 주제로 선택한 흥미, 재능이 스스로에게 왜 중요한지, 어떤 의미가 있는지 잘 나타내는 문장입니다.

4) I’m sure there are hundreds of doll furniture sets out there in that same gray and pink, but there is only one with fitted (albeit with sloppy stitching) navy blue covers.불필요하게 과도한 묘사입니다. 같은 주제의 예시는 피하는 게 좋습니다. There’s a sense of pride there, however small. I’ve been lucky to have the time, the energy, and the resources to be artistic, to craft things. My family has always encouraged my efforts whether I be sewing a Christmas gift or building a bookcase. As my projects have evolved, I’ve come to realize that making things, useful or otherwise, is very much an important part of who I am. 5) It allows me to make use of my imagination, creativity, logic, and technical skills.취미를 자기개발의 원동력으로 사용하는 좋은 예시입니다. 경험들을 반복하며 무엇을 배웠고 얻었는지 표현하는 것이 아주 중요한 포인트입니다. 대학교 에세이의 경우 항상 간결하고 함축적이어야 합니다.

And it’s not just about making something for the sake of making something. 6) I feel a connection to my mother’s family, from a rural village in Sweden, when I make candles. I feel a connection to my grandmother, who passed away last year, when I use the thimble she gave me when I was thirteen. 좋은 예이지만, 위치가 잘못되었습니다. 예시와 감상은 분리되어야 읽기가 편해집니다.

I feel resourceful when I use leftover wood scraps from our new barn to make coasters for the coffee table. Crafting for me is not just a hobby, not something I do when I’m bored. 7) It’s a way to use my environment, to discover tools, and shortcuts, and new ways of looking at things. It’s a chance for me to use my head and my hands to make something pretty, or practical, or fun.에세이의 초반과 후반에 이 문단처럼 ‘배운 점’을 강조하는 것은 아주 좋은 습관입니다. 배운 점 들을 어떻게 활용하고 더 발전시킬지에 대한 내용이 추가로 있으면 더욱 좋겠습니다.

I don’t plan on majoring in art, architecture, design, or anything remotely craft-based. I don’t want it to be my career. I think a part of me is worried that I’ll lose my love of making things if there’s homework involved, or if I have to rely on it for a paycheck. I want it to stay a pastime, to stay a way for me to relax, enjoy myself, and cultivate a sense of independence. I’ll never stop being a crafty person—I’ll always have a box of colored pencils, or a sewing kit, or a cordless drill on hand. I don’t know where I’ll be in twenty years, or even ten. 8) But I know wherever I am, whatever I’m doing.학생이 미래에 무엇을 하고 싶은 지 모른다고 적는 것은 문제가 되지 않지만 계획은 필요합니다. 예를 들어 포괄적으로 “대학교에서 여러 학문을 접해볼 것이다” 라는 표현도 괜찮습니다. I will be the person I am because of that little girl, patiently sewing together tiny pieces of fabric on her bedroom floor: creating something great, something new, something entirely her own.